OET interlinear 1 KI 11:24

uW Translation Notes:

Note 1 topic: figures-of-speech / infostructure

וַ⁠יִּקְבֹּ֤ץ עָלָי⁠ו֙ אֲנָשִׁ֔ים וַ⁠יְהִ֣י שַׂר־גְּד֔וּד בַּ⁠הֲרֹ֥ג דָּוִ֖ד אֹתָ֑⁠ם

(Some words not found in UHB: and,he_gathered on/upon/above=him/it men and=he/it_was chief marauding_band when,killed Dāvid DOM=them and,they_went Dammeseq and=they_lived in,it and,they_reigned in,Damascus )

If it would be more natural in your language, you may want to put the information about when David killed them before the information that he gathered men to himself. Alternate translation: [For when David killed them, he gathered men to himself, and he became the commander of a raiding band]

Note 2 topic: figures-of-speech / explicit

בַּ⁠הֲרֹ֥ג דָּוִ֖ד אֹתָ֑⁠ם

(Some words not found in UHB: and,he_gathered on/upon/above=him/it men and=he/it_was chief marauding_band when,killed Dāvid DOM=them and,they_went Dammeseq and=they_lived in,it and,they_reigned in,Damascus )

The author assumes that readers will know that the phrase when David killed them refers to David’s defeat of Hadadezer and his army, as recorded in [2 Samuel 8:3–5](../2sa/08/03.md). You could say that explicitly if that would be helpful to your readers. Alternate translation: [when David defeated Hadadezer and killed many of his other soldiers]

Note 3 topic: figures-of-speech / explicitinfo

בְּ⁠דַמָּֽשֶׂק

(Some words not found in UHB: and,he_gathered on/upon/above=him/it men and=he/it_was chief marauding_band when,killed Dāvid DOM=them and,they_went Dammeseq and=they_lived in,it and,they_reigned in,Damascus )

Since the author has already named Damascus earlier in the sentence, it might seem that the expression in Damascus here contains extra information that would not be natural to express in your language. If so, you could shorten it. Alternate translation: [there]