OET interlinear REV 9:5

uW Translation Notes:

Note 1 topic: figures-of-speech / activepassive

ἐδόθη αὐτοῖς ἵνα μὴ ἀποκτείνωσιν αὐτούς, ἀλλ’ ἵνα βασανισθήσονται

˱it˲_˓was˒_given ˱to˲_them in_order_that (Some words not found in SR-GNT: Καί ἐδόθη αὐτοῖς ἵνα μή ἀποκτείνωσιν αὐτούς ἀλλʼ ἵνα βασανισθήσονται μῆνας πέντε καί ὁ βασανισμός αὐτῶν ὡς βασανισμός σκορπίου ὅταν παίσῃ ἄνθρωπον)

If your language does not use these passive forms, you could express the ideas in active form or in another way that is natural in your language. Alternate translation: [God did not allow the locusts to kill these people but to torment them for five months]

Note 2 topic: writing-pronouns

ἐδόθη αὐτοῖς ἵνα μὴ ἀποκτείνωσιν αὐτούς

˱it˲_˓was˒_given ˱to˲_them in_order_that (Some words not found in SR-GNT: Καί ἐδόθη αὐτοῖς ἵνα μή ἀποκτείνωσιν αὐτούς ἀλλʼ ἵνα βασανισθήσονται μῆνας πέντε καί ὁ βασανισμός αὐτῶν ὡς βασανισμός σκορπίου ὅταν παίσῃ ἄνθρωπον)

The them refers in its first instance to the locusts John describes in [9:3](../09/03.md) and in its second instance the people John describes in [9:4](../09/04.md) who did not have the seal of God on their foreheads. It may be helpful to clarify this for your readers. Alternate translation: [it was given to the locusts that they should not kill these people]

Note 3 topic: figures-of-speech / simile

ὁ βασανισμὸς αὐτῶν ὡς βασανισμὸς σκορπίου, ὅταν παίσῃ ἄνθρωπον

the (Some words not found in SR-GNT: Καί ἐδόθη αὐτοῖς ἵνα μή ἀποκτείνωσιν αὐτούς ἀλλʼ ἵνα βασανισθήσονται μῆνας πέντε καί ὁ βασανισμός αὐτῶν ὡς βασανισμός σκορπίου ὅταν παίσῃ ἄνθρωπον)

The point of this comparison is that just as the sting of a scorpion is very painful, the torment that people would experience after these locusts stung them would be very painful. If it would be helpful in your language, you could make this point explicitly. Alternate translation: [their torment when the locusts stung them would be very painful, as the sting of a scorpion is very painful for a person]