OET interlinear 2 SAM 24:10

uW Translation Notes:

Note 1 topic: figures-of-speech / metaphor

וַ⁠יַּ֤ךְ לֵב־דָּוִד֙ אֹת֔⁠וֹ

(Some words not found in UHB: and,it_struck heart_of Dāvid DOM=him/it after so numbered DOM the,people and=he/it_said Dāvid to/towards YHWH sinned very which/who done and=now YHWH take_away now DOM guilt_of your_servant_of,your that/for/because/then/when acted_~_foolishly very )

Here, the heart represents a person’s thoughts, feelings, and conscience. When the author says that David’s heart struck him, he means that David came to feel guilty about what he had done. If it would be helpful in your language, you could state the meaning plainly. Alternate translation: [But David’s conscience troubled him] or [But David felt guilty]

Note 2 topic: writing-pronouns

אַחֲרֵי־כֵ֖ן סָפַ֣ר אֶת־הָ⁠עָ֑ם

after so numbered DOM the,people

As the rest of this expression shows, the pronoun this refers to David’s action of counting the people of Israel. It may be helpful to clarify this for your readers. Alternate translation: [after this action of counting the people]

Note 3 topic: figures-of-speech / 123person

אֶת־עֲוֺ֣ן עַבְדְּ⁠ךָ֔

DOM DOM guilt_of (Some words not found in UHB: and,it_struck heart_of Dāvid DOM=him/it after so numbered DOM the,people and=he/it_said Dāvid to/towards YHWH sinned very which/who done and=now YHWH take_away now DOM guilt_of your_servant_of,your that/for/because/then/when acted_~_foolishly very )

David is speaking of himself in the third person as your servant to show humility. If it would be helpful in your language, you could translate this in a humble form in the first person. Alternate translation: [the iniquity that I, your servant, have committed]

Note 4 topic: grammar-connect-words-phrases

כִּ֥י

(Some words not found in UHB: and,it_struck heart_of Dāvid DOM=him/it after so numbered DOM the,people and=he/it_said Dāvid to/towards YHWH sinned very which/who done and=now YHWH take_away now DOM guilt_of your_servant_of,your that/for/because/then/when acted_~_foolishly very )

Here the word for introduces not a reason but an elaboration. David is using it to characterize his previous statement about having sinned greatly. Alternate translation: [indeed]