OET interlinear DEU 23:21

uW Translation Notes:

Note 1 topic: writing-poetry

תִדֹּ֥ר נֶ֨דֶר֙

(Some words not found in UHB: that/for/because/then/when make (a)_vow to/for=YHWH God_of,your not postpone to,pay,it that/for/because/then/when to_demand he,will_require_it YHWH God_of,your from,with,you and=it_was in=you(ms) guilty_of_sin )

Moses is using a construction in which a verb and its object come from the same root. You may be able to use the same construction in your language to express the meaning here. Alternatively, your language may have another way of saying this. Alternate translation: [you make a solemn vow]

Note 2 topic: grammar-connect-logic-result

כִּֽי־דָּרֹ֨שׁ יִדְרְשֶׁ֜⁠נּוּ יְהוָ֤ה אֱלֹהֶ֨י⁠ךָ֙ מֵֽ⁠עִמָּ֔⁠ךְ וְ⁠הָיָ֥ה בְ⁠ךָ֖ חֵֽטְא

(Some words not found in UHB: that/for/because/then/when make (a)_vow to/for=YHWH God_of,your not postpone to,pay,it that/for/because/then/when to_demand he,will_require_it YHWH God_of,your from,with,you and=it_was in=you(ms) guilty_of_sin )

The word translated as for indicates that what follows is a reason for what came before. Use a connector in your language that makes it clear that what follows is a reason for what came before. Alternate translation: [because Yahweh your God will surely require it from you, and it would be sin for you]

Note 3 topic: figures-of-speech / reduplication

דָּרֹ֨שׁ יִדְרְשֶׁ֜⁠נּוּ יְהוָ֤ה אֱלֹהֶ֨י⁠ךָ֙

(Some words not found in UHB: that/for/because/then/when make (a)_vow to/for=YHWH God_of,your not postpone to,pay,it that/for/because/then/when to_demand he,will_require_it YHWH God_of,your from,with,you and=it_was in=you(ms) guilty_of_sin )

Moses is repeating forms of the verb require in order to intensify his expression of the idea that it conveys. If your language can repeat words for intensification, it would be appropriate to do that here in your translation. If not, your language may have another way of expressing the intensification. Alternate translation: [Yahweh your God will absolutely require it]

Note 4 topic: figures-of-speech / abstractnouns

וְ⁠הָיָ֥ה בְ⁠ךָ֖ חֵֽטְא

and=it_was in=you(ms) guilty_of_sin

If your language does not use an abstract noun for the idea of sin, you could express the same idea in another way. Alternate translation: [and you would be sinning]

Note 5 topic: writing-pronouns

וְ⁠הָיָ֥ה בְ⁠ךָ֖ חֵֽטְא

and=it_was in=you(ms) guilty_of_sin

The pronoun it refers to not fulfilling the vow. It may be helpful to clarify this for your readers. Alternate translation: [and not fulfilling the vow would be sin for you]